I have rewritten my product descriptions as suggested. I still would like a logo. I would also like help with SEO. I have read Shopify's "how to" on SEO but quite frankly I was just more confused. I also finally joined Facebook but have not intergrated my store with it. It's a bit overwhelming. I don't want to just BAM in your face here is my store. But I do need to drive traffic and convert sales.
I noticed that many of your product pages don't have images on white backgrounds. This format is really effective for conversions as it leaves out any distractions from the picture.
Big stores like Amazon and know this and make it pretty much mandatory for their merchants to have a white background on their product photos, since they know it's what converts best.
You can learn more about white background vs. in-context product photos on this article.
Hope that helps!